I've been reading a lot about cults lately. First I read Dear Leader and Escape from Camp 14, about the cult of Kim in North Korea. Then I read Prophet's Prey, about Warren Jeffs and his branch of the Fundamentalist Church of Latter Day Saints. I've previously read The 19th Wife, about polygamy in early Mormonism. Now I'm finishing up Going Clear, a critical look at Scientology. I did online research and learned about the Order of the Solar Temple, which should be cited more often here in North America. And Eastern Lightning. And a whole bunch of other cults.
Years ago, I used to joke that I should start my own religion. I said, "I write science fiction. Wouldn't it be nice to have thousands of worshipers who sell my books for me?"
I was joking, of course. The only way to describe someone who fakes being a messiah is a con artist. And the only way to cement an unquestioning congregation is to do immoral things. It's not just a matter of telling a couple of lies. It entails a lifetime of false promises, threats, and backing up those threats. A fallible human can't have a live pipeline to the Truth without a team to confirm it. Over decades of working together closely and secretively, the team develops in-fighting. One member who defects with the cult's secrets can ruin everything. So they need to be bound by a web of threats.
After all this reading, I've come to realize that starting a cult is much more difficult than it appears. Even if we leave aside morality, there's decades of very dedicated work involved. Cult leaders have specific personal traits in common. Those traits include megalomaniacal ambition, and ignoring family in favor of work. Running the cult is their life. We hear about cult leaders who are middle-aged or older because it takes decades for a cult to grow to a degree where news media picks up on it. Even leaders who inherit a cult, such as Kim Jong Il and Warren Jeffs, worked behind the scenes for decades in order to wrest power away from competitors and cement their absolute authority. (Kim Jong Un is an exceptionally young leader, but there is doubt that his authority is absolute.)
People quibble about how to define a cult, and indeed, the definition is fuzzy. The Raelians and the Unification Church are considered cults, but over the decades, they've proved to be mostly harmless. It should be noted that they're spread out and don't have an isolation policy. Some religions have a prophet/Pope, or several such prophets--but mainstream religious sects don't have a leader with absolute authority. The dangerous cults all seem to have a leader whom members can never question or challenge. Members who try to quit are punished, and secrecy is enforced in order to hide crimes. That's the sort of cult I'm talking about in this article.
Many mainstream religions incorporate guilt and atonement, but dangerous cults take this to an extreme. Members are encouraged to atone for the slightest infraction, as often as possible, and remain in a constant state of guilt. Studies on sociology confirm a human instinct: Guilt and shame are crucial to resolving conflict in a healthy society or relationship. If one partner feels no remorse while the other partner always takes the blame, the relationship turns abusive. Religious cults replicate an abusive relationship on a massive scale. The leaders of the cult feel no remorse while the larger membership is constantly atoning.
Cult founders seem to share traits in common. Some of those traits are no surprise: Minor criminal charges prior to starting the cult, narcissism, a history of mental illness, and a history of making grand claims. I was surprised by other traits that kept showing up among these infamous men. Most cult leaders have a history of multiple sex partners or wives, and a great many children. They claim to value family and marriage as holy, yet neglect their own families. They marry underage girls. They have one long-term wife or partner who enables their tycoon lifestyle and whose support is vital. You might expect a cult founder to have been abused as a child, but many seem to come from stable or privileged homes. They downplay their parents and sometimes banish them from their lives. They were mediocre students who had trouble making friends or dating when they were young. They tend to be writers or painters, on top of being spiritual philosophers. No matter how much sex, material assets, or worshipers they gain, they grow increasingly hard to appease. They demand impossible projects and punish faithful members on a whim. Outsiders describe them as pathetic and sullen, while worshipers describe them as grandfatherly or jovial. They're distrustful of everyone and are often described as paranoid.
I wonder if they're on a quest for people who respect them without enabling their sociopathic behavior. Many cult founders seem to have been disparaged by teachers or classmates when they were kids. Typical cult founders seem to have malignant narcissism; they might grow up believing that teachers and classmates were too stupid or self-absorbed to recognize a true genius. The future cult founder gains respect when he makes grandiose claims, such as "I heard God talking to me." Untroubled by a sense of morality, he spends decades honing his ability to make grandiose claims. His burgeoning confidence allows him to attract friends. But he's troubled by his own lack of morality. He observe morality in friends and know something is amiss. So he explores spirituality. After decades of soul-searching, he's convinced that he has gained True Wisdom and he alone has the One True Answer. He believes he's figured out how to be happy and moral. His certainty draws people on a similar spiritual quest. Surrounded by awe-struck sycophants, his immoral nature and predatory instincts leads to temptation. He caves into temptation and commits a crime--child molestation or adultery--and rationalizes it by assuming it's what God wants. After all, he's already established his own wisdom. Now he has a perfect excuse to avoid feeling guilt or remorse. So he does it again. And again. Inwardly, he's terrified that his congregation will call him out and accuse him of being a criminal, but the congregation is taken in by every lie and excuse. So the 'messiah' loses respect for his congregation and grows bolder.
There's my unofficial criminal profile of a cult founder. I'll use it in a future novel! My fictional cult leader will be female, like they almost never are, but what the hey.
The other half of the cult equation--the faithful congregation--should not be ignored or excused. Adults who join a cult of their own free will are enablers. It's easy to see them as victims, since they often give away all their worldly possessions and endure torture. Some cults commit mass suicide, or force members into labor camps or terrible living conditions that lead to death. But it should not be forgotten that faithful members will give away their own children to be raped by a cult leader, believing it will lead salvation. They're desperate for someone they trust to control their lives and make all their important decisions--because deep down, they don't trust themselves.
A rare cult member will break away when pushed to an extreme. For instance, a pregnant Scientologist left when her punishment led to her baby nearly dying from lack of care. A polygamist Fundamentalist Mormon left when his wife and children were reassigned to someone else. North Koreans risk their lives to escape starvation and death camps. Yet the overwhelming majority of cult members will put up with all this and more. They'll become a living bomb, or feed toxic Kool-Aid to their kids, if their cult leader demands it.
The victims are the world governments--taxpaying citizens--who unwittingly or unwillingly support a cult. Most cults have a pool of eager slave labor, so wealth is easy for them. They have systematic approaches to any legal trouble they run into. They're more like governments than corporations; founded on ideology and protected by a militia. They win in courts, they win welfare aid, and sometimes they win sympathy from the general population by owning the news station or selling propaganda. They're more powerful than most organized crime rings, and more of a resource drain on the nations that shelter them.
Children raised in a cult should also be considered victims. Everyone deserves basic human rights: life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness. Children in cults don't get the latter two. Little girls in cults tend to be married before they're old enough to know what sex is. If they try to escape, they're kidnapped, and their family is threatened with bankruptcy, ostracism, or torture. Child brides are basically slaves. Boys in cults tend to be forced into child labor, which is also a form of slavery. They're not given a choice. They cannot grow up to fulfill their human potential to pursue happiness. Liberty is a foreign concept to them.
Religious tolerance is an important principle, necessary for freedom; the basic human right of liberty. I'm all for allowing Wiccans to call the four corners. Satanists can have their private nude rituals with consenting adults. But basic human rights must take priority over religious status. If a religious organization kills or enslaves its members, or anyone else, then it ought to lose its status as a protected entity, and be considered hostile and criminal.
Cults rarely cross the murder line, although some indirectly kill members through neglect or mistreatment. If legal action against cults is to succeed, it should probably focus on enslavement: child brides, child labor, and unpaid adult laborers. Basic human rights violations should prove that the organization does not deserve legal protection.
Nov 13, 2014
Oct 3, 2014
Soon: Four Chilling Tales ~ horror stories
If you're in the mood for Halloween, I'd love to get reviews on this anthology, which includes four authors and my illustrations.
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Ghosts, cannibals, perverts, freaks ... they might be in your neighborhood. Even under your own roof. They're definitely in this collection of four tales of contemporary horror by acclaimed authors James Maxey, Abby Goldsmith, Rebecca Roland, and Sarah Kelderman. Learn what horrors lurk just beyond your field of vision. Horrors that will reveal themselves ... Soon.
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SOON: Four Chilling Tales
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Ghosts, cannibals, perverts, freaks ... they might be in your neighborhood. Even under your own roof. They're definitely in this collection of four tales of contemporary horror by acclaimed authors James Maxey, Abby Goldsmith, Rebecca Roland, and Sarah Kelderman. Learn what horrors lurk just beyond your field of vision. Horrors that will reveal themselves ... Soon.
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Sep 30, 2014
Under the Dome season 2 finale
I don't watch a lot of TV, and lazy writing on series is half the reason why. I was laughing in agreement with this review on TV.com about the season finale of Under the Dome. This show is like a dumbed down version of Lost. Not that Lost was all that brilliant, but at least it took itself somewhat seriously for the first three seasons. The characters remained consistent that long.
As I watched the season finale of season 2 of Under the Dome, I couldn't help but reflect on how many characters have become a) murderers, b) melodramatic jerks, or c) murderous melodramatic jerks.
In the finale episode: The high school science teacher (murderous melodramatic jerk) went ahead and murdered/euthanized the prophet-artist (melodramatic somewhat nice person), then got murdered by the used car salesman sheriff (murderous melodramatic jerk), who also punched his hermit brother (murderer), then went on to shoot a nice hoarder in an attempt to murder the lead female (melodramatic jerk), and then got shot by his sometimes-evil-sometimes-sweet son (murderous melodramatic jerk). Got all that straight? It's like some kind of weird nonsensical soap opera.
And then there are random monarch butterflies, glowing purple rocks, random dome weirdness, tunnels that lead to mysterious cliffs, some kind of evil corporation/government with an unknown agenda, a suck-hole in the woods, and a time traveling dead teenage girl (melodramatic jerk) who beckons people towards mysterious light.
The show is falling apart under the strain of not making any sense.
I don't know if they'll renew it for a third season, but I can't see how the writers (assuming the show has writers) can possibly salvage any hint of a coherent story. If this was a novel, I would have stopped reading. The show bears very little resemblance to the Stephen King novel.
And yet I kept watching. Some of the characters have good chemistry together. Some of the actors are really great at hamming it up, despite their role's lack of consistency. Big Jim and Junior are fun. Their characters have so much potential.
As I watched the season finale of season 2 of Under the Dome, I couldn't help but reflect on how many characters have become a) murderers, b) melodramatic jerks, or c) murderous melodramatic jerks.
In the finale episode: The high school science teacher (murderous melodramatic jerk) went ahead and murdered/euthanized the prophet-artist (melodramatic somewhat nice person), then got murdered by the used car salesman sheriff (murderous melodramatic jerk), who also punched his hermit brother (murderer), then went on to shoot a nice hoarder in an attempt to murder the lead female (melodramatic jerk), and then got shot by his sometimes-evil-sometimes-sweet son (murderous melodramatic jerk). Got all that straight? It's like some kind of weird nonsensical soap opera.
And then there are random monarch butterflies, glowing purple rocks, random dome weirdness, tunnels that lead to mysterious cliffs, some kind of evil corporation/government with an unknown agenda, a suck-hole in the woods, and a time traveling dead teenage girl (melodramatic jerk) who beckons people towards mysterious light.
The show is falling apart under the strain of not making any sense.
I don't know if they'll renew it for a third season, but I can't see how the writers (assuming the show has writers) can possibly salvage any hint of a coherent story. If this was a novel, I would have stopped reading. The show bears very little resemblance to the Stephen King novel.
And yet I kept watching. Some of the characters have good chemistry together. Some of the actors are really great at hamming it up, despite their role's lack of consistency. Big Jim and Junior are fun. Their characters have so much potential.
Aug 29, 2014
Treating the Book 1 Beginning Problem
I thought I was finally ready to submit Book 1. It turns out I wasn't.
The good news is, I finally understand why the beginning of Book 1 has been such a problem. It's not the prose. It's not the main character, per se. It's not bad luck, or a hatred of telepaths, or anything arcane. It's jaded reader expectations. Jaded readers see a child-genius-orphan-telepath-wheelchair-user, and expect a bland character who cruises through life with ease and saves the day. They're expecting him to turn into Artemis Fowl + Professor X. Or, as another writer put it: How do you imply that there's more to a character than there seems at first, without giving the whole game away?
I've written myself into a corner on this one. The character doesn't follow the tropes, but if I tell you that, it gives the whole game away. His trope attributes are all vital to the story. There's simply no way to change this character without ruining the story--and no way to introduce him without turning off jaded literary agents. He is what he is.
But knowing is half the battle.
I spent the last decade wondering why I couldn't get the beginning right, no matter what I did. Now I'm able to zero in on the root of the problem. I might never be able to fully 'fix' it, or make it palatable to a jaded reader who expects the worst ... but I can treat the symptoms. I finally have the correct diagnosis. After so many years of wondering why the first chapters never worked magic on readers while the rest of the book did, this is a huge relief.
I wanted to start querying agents in March. Now it looks like it will be September or later. I wish it hadn't taken me a decade of start+stop frustration to figure out the root of this problem. But, as the slaves in my series say, knowledge is worth a bit of pain.
My treatment plan is as follows:
1) Add a prologue from the point of view of the only person on Earth who knows that the main character is not what he appears to be. Prologues are out of vogue and this is a minor antagonist, but it seems necessary, given the problem. Her POV can explain quite a lot.
I wanted to let the reader discover the main character's true nature along with him ... but a jaded reader assumes they already know the main character's true nature. This prologue will give them a more accurate estimation.
2) Have a character comment on one of the tropes. This proves that I didn't include the trait subconsciously or out of ignorance.
3) Make everything else in the first chapters as un-trope-like as possible. I'm focusing on having other characters act in unexpected-yet-still-believable ways.
4) Re-purpose my query letter to emphasize the main character's failure to save the day. This is extremely tricky, since query letters are supposed to making the main character sound heroic. I need to make him sound heroic, yet emphasize the fact that he's not the hero they expect. Urrrrgh.
Here's my August 2014 query pitch:
Thomas never lets anyone take advantage of him. As a 12-year-old with spinal muscular atrophy, he relies on caretakers ... yet dominates adults because he knows their secrets. No one else has his powers. Or so it seems.
When other telepaths invade Thomas's mind, ripping into his embarrassing secrets and peering through his eyes, he's amazed that his powers are commonplace. Trillions of telepaths like him rule the galaxy. They transport Thomas to an alien metropolis where his most indulgent fantasies are actualized through advanced technology. Here Thomas is normal--but everyone who isn't a telepath gets brutally enslaved. Elite telepaths will kill Thomas in a nanosecond if he aids slaves such as his foster family and friends. Or if he reverts to 'savage' emotions, such as compassion. Unable to outwit or deceive his brethren, Thomas begins to suppress his emotions and give up.
His desperate friends must prove that slaves are superior to the master race of telepaths. They must convince Thomas to challenge his own conceits ... before he becomes just another brilliant, depraved slave-master. The freedom of the universe is at stake.
Aug 2, 2014
Subverting tropes: a hard sell
I like to subvert tropes. I take traits that readers have seen too many times before--a gentle giant, for instance--and turn that character into something unexpected. Readers figure that a gentle giant will be misunderstood, considered a monster when he really isn't. The reader rolls their eyes ... until the plot takes an unexpected turn, and the gentle giant gains dangerous berserker tendencies that get innocent bystanders killed. Now the reader must reexamine their assumptions and wonder if he really is a monster, despite his depiction as kind and gentle.
The main character in my novel (Book 1 of the epic series) is front-loaded with tropes. He's a child genius. In a wheelchair. With telepathy. Mistrusting readers are rolling their eyes, thinking they've seen this before, in Artemis Fowl and Ender Wiggin and Professor X. Such readers assume that he's going to save the world (or his friends, or whatever) with his genius and telepathic abilities. They'd go on assuming that ... until he doesn't. About 30% into the novel, the story takes an unexpected twist, causing the reader to reexamine their assumptions about geniuses and telepaths and disabled protagonists. His strengths are being a child and being disabled; his weaknesses are being a genius and being telepathic. It's the opposite of what audiences are trained to expect.
I should have expected that this would be a hard sell. Holy cow. I'm running into a roadblock where industry professionals see the trope, assume that's all it is, and stop reading before the trope gets subverted.*
One beta reader suggested that I plant hints of trope subversion in the first chapter or two. I'm not sure that's feasible, since the beauty of trope subversion is setting up reader expectations before blowing them to smithereens.
Has anyone else run into this problem when subverting tropes? Have you found a way around it?
* The first chapter has other red flags for industry readers, but the trope assumption seems to be one of two 'kill switch' factors. The other major red flag is the protagonist's young age, which industry professionals consider wrong for YA crossover or adult markets, A Game of Thrones and Ender's Game notwithstanding.
The main character in my novel (Book 1 of the epic series) is front-loaded with tropes. He's a child genius. In a wheelchair. With telepathy. Mistrusting readers are rolling their eyes, thinking they've seen this before, in Artemis Fowl and Ender Wiggin and Professor X. Such readers assume that he's going to save the world (or his friends, or whatever) with his genius and telepathic abilities. They'd go on assuming that ... until he doesn't. About 30% into the novel, the story takes an unexpected twist, causing the reader to reexamine their assumptions about geniuses and telepaths and disabled protagonists. His strengths are being a child and being disabled; his weaknesses are being a genius and being telepathic. It's the opposite of what audiences are trained to expect.
I should have expected that this would be a hard sell. Holy cow. I'm running into a roadblock where industry professionals see the trope, assume that's all it is, and stop reading before the trope gets subverted.*
One beta reader suggested that I plant hints of trope subversion in the first chapter or two. I'm not sure that's feasible, since the beauty of trope subversion is setting up reader expectations before blowing them to smithereens.
Has anyone else run into this problem when subverting tropes? Have you found a way around it?
* The first chapter has other red flags for industry readers, but the trope assumption seems to be one of two 'kill switch' factors. The other major red flag is the protagonist's young age, which industry professionals consider wrong for YA crossover or adult markets, A Game of Thrones and Ender's Game notwithstanding.
May 22, 2014
Writing Goals and the Odyssey Writing Workshop
In a discussion on Goodreads, author Susan Shell Winston asked if I'd started writing my epic science fiction series before attending the Odyssey Writing Workshop, and if the workshop changed my ideas about it.
Great question! Yes. I wrote the original drafts of Book 1 and Book 2 before I'd ever heard of Odyssey, and before I learned proper grammar. I just wanted to tell a good story. Despite excited beta reader reactions, my amateur manuscript gathered a solid wall of rejections from agents and publishers. So I went to Odyssey in hopes of networking enough to get my manuscript read. Plus, I was a fan of that year's writer in residence, George R.R. Martin.
During Odyssey, I learned so much, I added two new goals. I would: a) scrap those novel drafts and do a complete rewrite from scratch, and b) hone my short story craft and aim for at least one pro sale, since that credit might catch a literary agent's attention.
It took a few years, but I've accomplished both those goals. Sadly, I'm still working towards my original goal of getting a literary agent or major publisher to read the manuscript of Book 1--the rewritten 2x version. This ongoing quest has led me to co-found novelist groups, complete additional novels in my series, and gain a lot more practice at storytelling and writing. At this point in my life, I feel capable of either accomplishing what I set out to do, or indie publishing a complete six-book series that will appeal to a broad range of readers.
Great question! Yes. I wrote the original drafts of Book 1 and Book 2 before I'd ever heard of Odyssey, and before I learned proper grammar. I just wanted to tell a good story. Despite excited beta reader reactions, my amateur manuscript gathered a solid wall of rejections from agents and publishers. So I went to Odyssey in hopes of networking enough to get my manuscript read. Plus, I was a fan of that year's writer in residence, George R.R. Martin.
During Odyssey, I learned so much, I added two new goals. I would: a) scrap those novel drafts and do a complete rewrite from scratch, and b) hone my short story craft and aim for at least one pro sale, since that credit might catch a literary agent's attention.
It took a few years, but I've accomplished both those goals. Sadly, I'm still working towards my original goal of getting a literary agent or major publisher to read the manuscript of Book 1--the rewritten 2x version. This ongoing quest has led me to co-found novelist groups, complete additional novels in my series, and gain a lot more practice at storytelling and writing. At this point in my life, I feel capable of either accomplishing what I set out to do, or indie publishing a complete six-book series that will appeal to a broad range of readers.
Apr 10, 2014
Online Housekeeping
I updated my website, adding a section for my short stories, and a Goodreads widget to my book reviews. I also joined Wattpad. I'm preparing for a major round of novel submissions, so I'm forcing myself to work on the dreaded query letter. More to come soon ...
Nov 21, 2013
Now I understand gambling addiction
While I've been stuck at home, recovering from an illness, I've been compulsively playing two iPhone game apps by Storm8/TeamLava: "Candy Blast Mania" and "Bubble Mania." They are, respectively, a match-3 game and a bubble shooter game. I love the adorable animations (and I'm an animator), which is part of it. The evil gummy bear is so cute when he gets mad!
So I'm trying to figure out why I'm addicted, especially since I'm on the higher levels (around 120), which require a ridiculous amount of luck on top of skill. Normally, I HATE luck factor games. And these are frustrating as hell. I'll play for 15 minutes and come within 1 point of beating the level, and then I'll get the wrong-colored bubble or something, and have to start all over. It's idiotic. And yet I keep playing.
Maybe this is why some gamblers keep returning to play slot machines. I've never understood that addition. I wouldn't waste money on this stuff. In fact, both of these game apps keep urging me to buy power-ups in order to beat the level, which I refuse to do. I know that's how they earn a profit, but that's a level of addiction I haven't sunk to, thankfully.
But it's weird how I get a little rush of pride when I finally beat a level, after 20 tries. I love seeing the evil gummy bear keel over, with his cute little dying voice. Sometimes he wears waffle armor, or cotton candy on his head! So adorable. And those baby raccoon-cats in Bubble Mania are so cute, even when they're crying. It feels so satisfying to pop a whole series of bubbles at once.
Yeah. I need to get out of the house more. I can't wait until this @#&%$! ear infection goes away.
Oct 31, 2013
Soon: Four Chilling Tales
Are you looking for something scary and short to read? Check out Soon: Four Chilling Tales, available for Amazon's Kindle. In my story, "Handicapped," a real estate agent searching for his missing wife will find a unique horror inside the house that's For Sale.
I'm sharing the table of contents with three other talented authors: James Maxey, Rebecca Roland, and Sarah Kelderman. Oh, and I drew the interior illustrations!
Happy Halloween, everyone!
I'm sharing the table of contents with three other talented authors: James Maxey, Rebecca Roland, and Sarah Kelderman. Oh, and I drew the interior illustrations!
Happy Halloween, everyone!
Jun 17, 2013
Penultimate Ending
As I head towards completion on the penultimate book in my Torth series, I'm wondering what note to end it on. Crowd-sourcing the ending of a novel is a bad idea--especially since most of the crowd hasn't read my novels--but I figured I'd ask your opinion, just to entertain myself.
How should this book end? Please note, the real question is where should I split the story between Books 5 and 6, since this series is actually one gigantic, epic story.
SPOILER ALERT. Don't continue if you don't want spoilers.
1) The protagonist goes against his own ethical code to create a brainwashed army of living zombies. This is a big step towards the 'dark side' for him, but a big step towards victory for the heroes. I guess this ending could be called bittersweet. I'm worried it might lose some fans, if they're rooting for that protagonist, since the resolution to this story-line would be in the next book.
2) The protagonist sees friend #3 (whom he owes his life and much else to) purposefully do something evil/manipulative to friends #1 and #2. The protagonist intervenes, and friend #3 gets furious and threatens to quit the war, which will leave all the heroes in a very bad position. This would be an ending where the readers are rooting for the protagonist, and worried for the heroes ... ideal, perhaps. But after all the battles and conquests in the rest of this book, it might seem a little anticlimactic.
3) The protagonist invents something that renders the heroes all but invincible, putting them in a very strong position at the end of the book. It might be too strong; readers might (wrongly) assume that the heroes have nothing left to worry about, and feel nonchalant about picking up the final book in the series.
4) The protagonist gets kidnapped by one of the major antagonists and put in a torture chamber. Then he's rescued with help from an unexpected friend; someone he wouldn't have relied on. He has a death match duel with the major antagonist, and wins/escapes. This is a classic heroic ending, but in my series it has some problems. There are three major antagonists in the series, and if I choose this ending, only one major antagonist will be left for Book 6. I'd rather not end with making the enemies seem too weak.
5) This is my favorite ending, but it will take a lot more wordage than the other endings--which might leave Book 6 short. This ending involves a super trap the enemies set up for the heroes, which they'll fall for. In this case, Book 5 would end on a very dark note, with the heroes in a horrible position. Readers will wonder how they're going to survive/escape. The problem with doing this one, besides word count, is that it is the 'darkest hour' moment of the epic, which should structurally come before the big climax. In other words, it should probably be reserved for Book 6. Otherwise Book 6 won't have a super low point in it.
Whew! Just writing those out helped me. Now I'm leaning towards option 2). If you actually read this, and if you have an opinion, let me know.
Thanks! And if you want to see how complicated the ending of this story is, I've diagrammed it on Padlet.
How should this book end? Please note, the real question is where should I split the story between Books 5 and 6, since this series is actually one gigantic, epic story.
SPOILER ALERT. Don't continue if you don't want spoilers.
1) The protagonist goes against his own ethical code to create a brainwashed army of living zombies. This is a big step towards the 'dark side' for him, but a big step towards victory for the heroes. I guess this ending could be called bittersweet. I'm worried it might lose some fans, if they're rooting for that protagonist, since the resolution to this story-line would be in the next book.
2) The protagonist sees friend #3 (whom he owes his life and much else to) purposefully do something evil/manipulative to friends #1 and #2. The protagonist intervenes, and friend #3 gets furious and threatens to quit the war, which will leave all the heroes in a very bad position. This would be an ending where the readers are rooting for the protagonist, and worried for the heroes ... ideal, perhaps. But after all the battles and conquests in the rest of this book, it might seem a little anticlimactic.
3) The protagonist invents something that renders the heroes all but invincible, putting them in a very strong position at the end of the book. It might be too strong; readers might (wrongly) assume that the heroes have nothing left to worry about, and feel nonchalant about picking up the final book in the series.
4) The protagonist gets kidnapped by one of the major antagonists and put in a torture chamber. Then he's rescued with help from an unexpected friend; someone he wouldn't have relied on. He has a death match duel with the major antagonist, and wins/escapes. This is a classic heroic ending, but in my series it has some problems. There are three major antagonists in the series, and if I choose this ending, only one major antagonist will be left for Book 6. I'd rather not end with making the enemies seem too weak.
5) This is my favorite ending, but it will take a lot more wordage than the other endings--which might leave Book 6 short. This ending involves a super trap the enemies set up for the heroes, which they'll fall for. In this case, Book 5 would end on a very dark note, with the heroes in a horrible position. Readers will wonder how they're going to survive/escape. The problem with doing this one, besides word count, is that it is the 'darkest hour' moment of the epic, which should structurally come before the big climax. In other words, it should probably be reserved for Book 6. Otherwise Book 6 won't have a super low point in it.
Whew! Just writing those out helped me. Now I'm leaning towards option 2). If you actually read this, and if you have an opinion, let me know.
Thanks! And if you want to see how complicated the ending of this story is, I've diagrammed it on Padlet.
Dec 5, 2012
Epic Science Fiction: Space Opera
TV shows such as Firefly, Farscape, Battlestar Galactica, Babylon 5, etc. have massive, loyal fan followings. Where are their equivalents in the book industry? I hardly see any. Epic space opera is very much in a low ebb right now. It seems that no one has had a space opera hit since Frank Herbert's Dune was published in 1965.
I think a large part of the lack of best-selling epic science fiction is its association with military fiction (a niche genre). These two don't need to go hand-in-hand, yet they often do. Many of the published Baen Books titles are military space opera. Ender's Game, Old Man's War, and the Vorkosigan saga are all arguably military space opera/epic SF. However, one could argue that George R.R. Martin's Game of Thrones and Robert Jordan's Wheel of Time are military fantasy. Why is epic science fiction consigned to the small niche of 'readers who like hard science fiction plus military stuff' while epic fantasy gets a broad audience? No one really thinks of those best-selling epic fantasy series as military fiction. They're associated with fascinating worlds, high adventure, epic battles and epic romances, colorful characters, and high stakes plots. Why can't epic science fiction have all this as well?
It can, and it should.
There's a war going on in my epic science fiction series. So yes, there are battles ... but it's not military fiction, any more than A Game of Thrones is military fiction. There's no chain of command until they create one. There are no uniforms. The story is not about learning who is in charge and who is subordinate. It's not about adjusting to military life. There are no barracks. The main characters are not soldiers.
In fact, one of my main characters is a handicapped boy who's too weak to walk. Another main character is a female elderly alien slave. Only one of my characters is a muscle-bound warrior type. That should make it clear: This Is Not Military Fiction!
One more thing, and then I'll get off my soap box. I want to read some new epic science fiction that has the same sense of grand adventure that we see in epic fantasy. It seems that book publishers have developed a bias against epic SF due to the boatloads of military epic SF already published. But there is more to epic SF than military fiction.
I'm a major Scott Sigler fan because he writes epic SF that isn't military. I love his books. But I want to see more along these lines. I've been told that literary agents shy away from space opera because they claim that it's 'hard to pull off well.' I think they mean to say that 'space opera is always military fiction, which doesn't sell well, and therefore we don't want to see it.'
I wish they'd give my saga a read. One more time: It isn't military!!!
I think a large part of the lack of best-selling epic science fiction is its association with military fiction (a niche genre). These two don't need to go hand-in-hand, yet they often do. Many of the published Baen Books titles are military space opera. Ender's Game, Old Man's War, and the Vorkosigan saga are all arguably military space opera/epic SF. However, one could argue that George R.R. Martin's Game of Thrones and Robert Jordan's Wheel of Time are military fantasy. Why is epic science fiction consigned to the small niche of 'readers who like hard science fiction plus military stuff' while epic fantasy gets a broad audience? No one really thinks of those best-selling epic fantasy series as military fiction. They're associated with fascinating worlds, high adventure, epic battles and epic romances, colorful characters, and high stakes plots. Why can't epic science fiction have all this as well?
It can, and it should.
There's a war going on in my epic science fiction series. So yes, there are battles ... but it's not military fiction, any more than A Game of Thrones is military fiction. There's no chain of command until they create one. There are no uniforms. The story is not about learning who is in charge and who is subordinate. It's not about adjusting to military life. There are no barracks. The main characters are not soldiers.
In fact, one of my main characters is a handicapped boy who's too weak to walk. Another main character is a female elderly alien slave. Only one of my characters is a muscle-bound warrior type. That should make it clear: This Is Not Military Fiction!
One more thing, and then I'll get off my soap box. I want to read some new epic science fiction that has the same sense of grand adventure that we see in epic fantasy. It seems that book publishers have developed a bias against epic SF due to the boatloads of military epic SF already published. But there is more to epic SF than military fiction.
I'm a major Scott Sigler fan because he writes epic SF that isn't military. I love his books. But I want to see more along these lines. I've been told that literary agents shy away from space opera because they claim that it's 'hard to pull off well.' I think they mean to say that 'space opera is always military fiction, which doesn't sell well, and therefore we don't want to see it.'
I wish they'd give my saga a read. One more time: It isn't military!!!
Jul 25, 2012
Awful Air France Ordeal
When we travel these
days, we all expect long lines, underpaid airport staff who don't care about
helping travelers, delayed flights, and hassles. That has become normal (and I found a good article about why that is). However, my
experience over the past 30 hours goes way beyond normal. I arrived at my destination a full day
later than scheduled. I've had to go through airport security three times during this journey. I've had to pick up my baggage and re-check it twice. The Air France staff lied and never provided
any truthful explanations for their behavior.
Everyone on my flight was subjected to the same ill treatment. The passengers were international, and
include children traveling alone, an old woman in a wheelchair, and families
with babies.
Air France flight 688 was
scheduled to depart Paris CDG at 1:30pm, and arrive in Atlanta around 5:30pm. What happened? We departed Paris at 2:45pm, diverted to Washington D.C. for no apparent reason, and arrived in Atlanta at 3:30am the next day.
Here's how my particular
adventure began.
If I had known what a mob
scene awaited me at Charles DeGaulle airport, I would have given myself 5 hours
to get to my gate instead of just 3 hours.
July is peak tourist season in Paris, yet the airport seemed ridiculously
understaffed and overcrowded; much worse than anything I've seen at LAX.
When I exited the RER train, there was a mad rush to the single escalator leading to Terminal 2. It got mobbed. I squeezed into the herd of travelers with
luggage, and followed the herd until we arrived in an atrium with passages to
2A, 2B, 2C, 2D, 2E, 2F, and 2G. I had no
idea where to go. A huge
monitor listed flights, but mine wasn't on there. The single information booth with its one
employee had a huge line. I was on the
verge of choosing a terminal at random when I lucked out. An airport employee hurried past me, and I
asked her where to go. She directed me
to 2E and hurried onward. I dragged my
luggage to what seemed like the world's busiest, most crowded terminal.
I squeezed into the
enormous mob crowding the Air France area.
There were no ropes or anything to corral the mob into orderly
lines. I figured I'd save time by
checking myself in using a passport scanning machine. However, the machine was French only, and when
it got to the passport part, it wouldn't work.
I'd wasted time by waiting on line for this machine. The people around me were unhelpful.
So I dragged my luggage around until I finally spotted an Air France employee. I asked her how I might check in. She flippantly told me to speak to another employee, pointing. I asked her where he was, since all I saw was a mob. She said, "he is there." I asked if there is a line to speak to him. She said, "no line."
So I dragged my luggage around until I finally spotted an Air France employee. I asked her how I might check in. She flippantly told me to speak to another employee, pointing. I asked her where he was, since all I saw was a mob. She said, "he is there." I asked if there is a line to speak to him. She said, "no line."
Bit by bit, I inched my
way into the mob. I realized they were
all waiting to speak to him, and plenty of anxious travelers were trying to cut
into the disorganized mob. Sure enough,
one short man was scanning passports, slowly, one by one. This one Air France employee was in charge of
scanning passports for hundreds of travelers trying to get to their flights on
time. Other Air France employees
frequently came by to speak to him, and he always gave his coworkers priority attention,
ignoring the mob of anxious travelers.
I waited for at least an
hour, and finally got the guy to scan my passport. He printed out my boarding passes and told me
to go to point 8 and 9. I was at point 1
and 2.
I dragged my luggage
through a ridiculously overcrowded terminal, only to find that point 8 and 9
was even more overcrowded. I had to wait
over an hour just to check my luggage.
The Air France employee who checked it barely spoke English, and she
waved vaguely for me to go somewhere else.
I followed other travelers through a maze until we arrived at a passport
checking station. Another huge line
awaited us.
By this time, it was past
noon, and I worried that I wouldn't make my flight, which was scheduled to
depart at 1:30pm. Boarding would begin
soon and I hadn't even seen the security line.
Other travelers in line were also anxious about their flights, many of
which were scheduled to depart soon.
No one came by to reassure us about our flights. The passport station employees were few and
far between, and they all seemed bored stiff.
They moved slowly and paused to chat with each other.
After my passport was
checked, I had to hurry through a corridor and more escalators. When I spotted a few Air France employees
hanging out and chatting, I asked them where gate L45 was. They pointed to a subway train, which was about
to leave. I leaped on board just in
time.
After exiting the subway, I finally
encountered the security line. It wasn't
as bad as the rest; they had a lot more employees working there. No body scanners. I got a brief pat down. My carry-on bag was searched. Then I was
through, and emerged into what looked like an expensive shopping mall. Sephora and other perfume shops were
everywhere.
I figured I was just in
time to board my flight. Relieved, I
rushed to the women's restroom, which featured only four stalls and a huge line. I emerged to learn that my flight was
delayed. Delta Airlines called me twice to let me
know this. It would have been nice if they only
called once, and nicer if they'd called earlier, while I was stressing out
about making my flight.
The flight didn't board
until 2:30pm. The hour-long flight delay caused me to worry that I'd miss the tight connection I needed to make in Atlanta. Maybe the delay was due to mechanical
problems or bad weather, but I suspect it was actually due to the poor handing
of passengers at CDG airport. If the plane had
left on time, there would only be about 50 passengers on it. The rest would be stuck in various lines.
The fiight was full when
it departed. We were perhaps 45 minutes
away from landing in Atlanta when our flight got diverted to Washington
D.C. The stewardesses claimed the change was due to a severe thunderstorm, and everyone believed them ... but hours later, we learned this was a lie. Atlanta had clear weather that evening, on July 23, 2012. No one ever explained why we were
diverted. I would still like to know.
And then we sat in the
stuffy airplane at the Dulles airport gate for hours, stretching a 7 hour
flight into a 10.5 hour ordeal. Babies
were crying, children were yelling. We
watched the sunset. People fretted
about missed connections. I knew I'd
missed mine.
Then the Air France crew
announced, in their poor English, that the pilot was tired and legally couldn't
fly any longer, so everyone would have to disembark and go through U.S. customs in Dulles.
We went through
customs. It took less than an hour. After that, we went to baggage claim to
retrieve our luggage, which took a long time to arrive. Then we were rushed through a line to
re-check our luggage to Atlanta, and we had to suffer through airport security
again. Then we were directed to an Air
France ticket counter to receive fresh instructions.
We waited at that ticket counter for hours. While we
waited in this interminable line, one of the stressed-out employees announced that our rerouted flight to Atlanta would depart at midnight. She claimed we would receive a meal voucher
and a hotel voucher for our trouble. In
reality, all we received was an $8 meal voucher for the only airport restaurant
still open at Dulles: Fuddruckers. The
Air France voucher didn't fully cover my overpriced airport hamburger meal.
By this time, the passengers were exhausted and furious. Several
passengers left, booking last-minute flights on different airlines. Others had final destinations near the
Washington D.C. metropolitan area, and they caught late night cabs or rented
cars. Still, hundreds of passengers
remained corralled in the Dulles airport, which was shut down for the
night. We ate Fuddruckers and
waited. It was past midnight.
The airplane gained a
fresh crew around 12:45am, and we began to board for our new flight from Dulles
to Atlanta. We sat in the same stuffy
airplane for another hour before it finally took off, around
2:00am. No one explained why we had to
wait so long.
We arrived in Atlanta
around 3:30am, and we got nothing for our trouble. No vouchers.
No help. The Atlanta airport was
shut down for the night, and all we saw were cleaning crew, who stared at the
hundreds of angry travelers from Air France 688.
The four Air France
employees on duty in Atlanta looked stunned by the hundreds of passengers who
suddenly showed up at 3:30am. It seemed
no one had told them what to expect.
They phoned in a manager to help out.
Still, the line moved slower than any before it. I was in the first third of the line, and it
took me over an hour to reach the counter.
There, I rechecked my
luggage, and got re-booked on another flight to my final destination in Texas, leaving at 8:50am. I had to go through airport security yet
again. My passport was examined for the tenth time.
The remaining travelers from Air France 688 entered the Atlanta
gate area. Atlanta is the world's busiest airport, but at this early hour, it was utterly empty, except for the late night cleaning crew. We had the whole automated subway train to ourselves. Here it is, the Atlanta subway at 4:30am:
I settled in at my new
gate and watched the sunrise. I should have been home yesterday. My Delta flight left on time, and I arrived home on July 24, 2012. I was so tired, I slept for an hour on that flight, despite the shrieking, kicking baby sitting on her mother's lap next to me.
As frustrated as I was,
there were people from that Air France flight 688 who had it worse. There were families with babies, an old woman
in a wheelchair, and people with flights connecting to Alaska, California, and Guatemala. I think one person was bound for
Australia. None of them will arrive on
the day they wanted to arrive. There
were several children traveling alone. I
noticed that Air France took special care with them, since a lost child would
turn our general ordeal into a P.R. nightmare.
If Air France existed in a competitive market for airlines, they would be offering free flights in compensation. Instead, they treated the passengers with lies ("go into the airport, there will be people lined up to help you") and no truthful explanations. They offered a brief apology and an $8 voucher for Fuddruckers, and that was it.
Jun 7, 2012
Ray Bradbury
Ray Bradbury has died at age 91. He was the last of the major "Golden Age" science fiction writers, with Asimov, Clarke, and Heinlein being the others who gained mainstream popularity, due to successful film adaptations of their novels. Of those writers, Bradbury was my favorite, and the only one I've met in person. He was outgoing and friendly, and always seemed willing to speak to fans and audiences at conventions such as Comic Con.
I won't match what many others will say in eulogy for Ray Bradbury. But I was just talking to some neighbors, and when I mentioned his death on the news, they confessed they'd never heard of him. History is easily forgotten. So I do want to make sure that future generations recognize the huge impact that the Golden Age of science fiction had on our culture, and remember that Asimov, Bradbury, and Clarke (the A-B-C) were a major part of that. They inspired many real astronauts, physicists, and biologists to go into that line of work and change the world we live in. They inspired contemporary authors, artists, and film directors to explore other worlds, which in turn has shaped pop culture. Perhaps you've never heard of Bradbury, but I'm 99% certain that people you have heard of--J.J. Abrams, Joss Whedon, Peter Jackson, Stephen King, Suzanne Collins, and many more--have read his books and consider him an influence.
When I attended a live panel with Ray Bradbury about his novel Fahrenheit 451, I was surprised by how many audience members focused on the book burning. Bradbury had to explain that the story wasn't mainly about politics, nor was it a Nazi allegory. It was about television. It was a cautionary tale about replacing active story consumption with passive story consumption--reading versus watching/listening. I thought this point was obvious in the book, and it's by far the best rendition of this theme I've ever read or seen.
I wasn't around before the invention of television, but when I read Fahrenheit 451, I wondered if Bradbury was right; maybe we have lost something in our leap from books to radio to TV to the internet. Even the best film or TV show is delivered in a format that limits the imagination; we are shown exactly what to think and feel, and when it's over, we easily forget and move on to the next one. Books are a much more personal, intimate experience, and a good book can have a huge and memorable impact on a person's life. One-hour TV shows and two-hour films and 5-minute internet shows crowd our attention, demanding that we LOOK and LISTEN so we can be up-to-date and discuss them with our friends. And as a result, people have less time for books ... and less time to truly ponder an idea.
I never thought I'd side with the old guy. I enjoy contemporary TV shows and films, and I'm a technophile. Yet I will admit that something of myself is lost in all this easy entertainment. I don't see myself as a brainwashed drone, the way Bradbury depicted the reality-show-addicted character of Mildred, yet I would undeniably be a much different person if I spent years without TV, film, or internet. I would read more. I would write more. And perhaps I would think more, and be a smarter, better person for it. But that's not the world any of us live in.
I'm glad that Bradbury wrote about it, and I hope other readers understand his point.
I won't match what many others will say in eulogy for Ray Bradbury. But I was just talking to some neighbors, and when I mentioned his death on the news, they confessed they'd never heard of him. History is easily forgotten. So I do want to make sure that future generations recognize the huge impact that the Golden Age of science fiction had on our culture, and remember that Asimov, Bradbury, and Clarke (the A-B-C) were a major part of that. They inspired many real astronauts, physicists, and biologists to go into that line of work and change the world we live in. They inspired contemporary authors, artists, and film directors to explore other worlds, which in turn has shaped pop culture. Perhaps you've never heard of Bradbury, but I'm 99% certain that people you have heard of--J.J. Abrams, Joss Whedon, Peter Jackson, Stephen King, Suzanne Collins, and many more--have read his books and consider him an influence.
When I attended a live panel with Ray Bradbury about his novel Fahrenheit 451, I was surprised by how many audience members focused on the book burning. Bradbury had to explain that the story wasn't mainly about politics, nor was it a Nazi allegory. It was about television. It was a cautionary tale about replacing active story consumption with passive story consumption--reading versus watching/listening. I thought this point was obvious in the book, and it's by far the best rendition of this theme I've ever read or seen.
I wasn't around before the invention of television, but when I read Fahrenheit 451, I wondered if Bradbury was right; maybe we have lost something in our leap from books to radio to TV to the internet. Even the best film or TV show is delivered in a format that limits the imagination; we are shown exactly what to think and feel, and when it's over, we easily forget and move on to the next one. Books are a much more personal, intimate experience, and a good book can have a huge and memorable impact on a person's life. One-hour TV shows and two-hour films and 5-minute internet shows crowd our attention, demanding that we LOOK and LISTEN so we can be up-to-date and discuss them with our friends. And as a result, people have less time for books ... and less time to truly ponder an idea.
I never thought I'd side with the old guy. I enjoy contemporary TV shows and films, and I'm a technophile. Yet I will admit that something of myself is lost in all this easy entertainment. I don't see myself as a brainwashed drone, the way Bradbury depicted the reality-show-addicted character of Mildred, yet I would undeniably be a much different person if I spent years without TV, film, or internet. I would read more. I would write more. And perhaps I would think more, and be a smarter, better person for it. But that's not the world any of us live in.
I'm glad that Bradbury wrote about it, and I hope other readers understand his point.
May 19, 2012
Latest Publications
I've been storing up some news, saving it for the opening of my redesigned website. But the website isn't quite ready to go live, and I don't want to wait any longer!
First, my article Implausible Dystopias: Logic Problems in Contemporary Dystopian Fiction is published in the April 2012 issue of the Copperfield Review. Read my opinion on dystopias and the bleak outlook permeating today's science fiction!
Fried Zombie Dee-Light! is available as an ebook, with a cover illustration by me. Read short stories by the talented Susan Abel Sullivan! The theme is zombies, the slant is humor.
I did interior illustrations for Skeptoid 4: Astronauts, Aliens, and Ape-Men, by podcast/educator Brian Dunning. The books and the podcast are fun to read!
Finally, I will be appearing at Armadillocon in July 2012, and I hope to be speaking on a panel. More news on that later!
Apr 9, 2012
HBO's Game of Thrones
It's time to critique something I love!
First: I think HBO is doing a wonderful job of adapting George R.R. Martin's series to film. The minor changes they've made to dialogue and events all serve the purpose of clarifying back story for viewers who've never read the books, or emphasizing character traits that need emphasizing. Kudos to HBO, and hooray for the screenwriters, directors, and producers who are making such great decisions. I would love to see other book adaptations done this well.
The main problem I have is with their casting choices. Many characters are cast well. The best choices are the actors who play Arya, Bran, Tyrion, Catelyn, Sansa, Petyr (Littlefinger), Joffrey, Cersei, Varys, Renly, Melisandre, Lysa, Shae, Theon, and Syrio Forel. But why does Stannis look and sound like he has a sense of humor? Why does Davos look and sound so regal? Why is Daenerys a bleached blond, and why is Craster well-groomed? Why does Jon Snow seem more like a poet than a northern ranger? Why does Gendry look more like a ballet dancer than a blacksmith's apprentice? Why does Robb Stark look pouty instead of battle-worthy? They should have gotten the guy who plays Grenn to play Jon, Robb, or Gendry. Samwell Tarly comes off as a bit of a creep, overdoing the social ineptness. Hodor seems a bit old for a young giant in the bloom of health. And Sandor Clegane (the Hound) isn't exactly hulking; he looks more pathetic than dangerously full of anger.
The problem goes deeper than these characters merely being different than how I envisioned them as a reader. If the actor doesn't fit the role, in terms of personality or physical type, then the scenes with that character ring false. An original screenplay has flexibility for an actor to redefine a character, but this is an adaptation of a book series, and therefore a rigid story. The actors cannot redefine the roles too much.
So viewers are told that Craster is a polygamous wildling who abuses his wives and daughters ... but upon seeing a well-groomed man, they might forget his role, or at least forget that he's a wildling. He simply doesn't look like the crazy hermit that he is. A viewer who has never read the books will have trouble understanding why so many characters fear the Hound, or refer to him as angry, since the actor shows no hint of that personality. Those scenes are written for someone who looks and acts more like an angry bad-ass.
I suppose viewers will be more accepting of heroic protagonists Jon Snow, Robb Stark, and Gendry as pretty and pouty actors, since that look is unfortunately the Hollywood norm these days. What happened to heroes who look more like (young) Harrison Ford, or Viggo, or Guy Pearce? Oh well. And I guess Daenerys exemplifies another Hollywood norm: collagen-injected lips and as much pout as possible. With that super-fake bombshell look, it's hard to take her seriously as a dothraki khaleesi roughing it on the grassy plains. That look seriously undermines her role in the story.
Finally, I'm going to complain about the snow setting of the Night's Watch scenes. I get the sense that no one on the board of producers and directors has ever lived in a snowy forest. In a truly cold setting, there would be icicles hanging off eaves and branches. Also, people's breath would be visible as white vapor. Every time I watch those scenes, I feel like I'm seeing a movie set instead of a real place. I'm sure other viewers are also jarred out of the story for the same reason. It sounds like I'm nit-picking, but attention to small details (like icicles and breath vapor) are what make a story come to life.
If anyone wants to take a look at the actors I'm talking about, here's the HBO cast page.
Apr 5, 2012
Spring Cleaning
I'm clearing out my gmail archives, which have attained shameful proportions. If my gmail was a person, it would be morbidly obese. Would you believe that it was 77% full? It clogged up at least 7000 MB ... just with email.
To all the people I neglected to reply to from the years 2003 to 2009: I'm sorry. Very, very sorry. This must be why I always feel a nagging sense of guilt.
I'm not a very good correspondent. Oftentimes, I put off a reply because I want to make it a good one, and then it falls off my inbox screen and I forget it exists. A better way to reach me might be blog comments! At least I'm sure to see it, since I don't get many. :-)
To all the people I neglected to reply to from the years 2003 to 2009: I'm sorry. Very, very sorry. This must be why I always feel a nagging sense of guilt.
I'm not a very good correspondent. Oftentimes, I put off a reply because I want to make it a good one, and then it falls off my inbox screen and I forget it exists. A better way to reach me might be blog comments! At least I'm sure to see it, since I don't get many. :-)
Feb 14, 2012
Mentally Flawed Heroes
Another day, another rejection letter from a literary agent. I realize that many agents are too busy for a new client, but the rejection stings more when it comes after a partial request. I can't help but hope "This is the one!" But she wasn't.
Anyway, here's my topic of thought. I'm attracted to mentally flawed protagonists. Give me a depressed dwarf (Tyrion Lannister), a moody guy with voices in his head (Rand al'Thor), or a flipper baby (Arturo Binewski) over a normal swashbuckling hero any day. I'll even extend this to comics and films. Hellboy and Spider-Man are way cooler than James Bond or Jason Bourne, to me. Bond or Bourne don't have enough issues.
In real life, of course, I would prefer to avoid people who hear voices or have murderous impulses. So why do I find "normal" heroes to be boring in fiction? I think it's because I immerse myself in the story, and become the heroic character for a time, which frees me to say, think, and do things I would never say, think, or do. One of my protagonists lies to himself and treats people with savage rudeness, which is definitely not something I approve of. If I knew him in real life, I'd hate him. But I like being inside his point of view, since it's so different from my own. And he has a lot of growing to do as a character, which makes for fun storytelling.
Here are some protagonists I've cooked up, over the years:
- a wheelchair-bound, telepathic child misanthrope
- an agoraphobic giant with an overprotective mother
- a bookish kid who watched an angry mob murder his family
- an anorexic mermaid
- a telepathic seductress with jealousy issues
- a gambler and compulsive liar who murdered his father
- a spoiled prince with solid gold and silver body parts who trusts no one
- a mountain man whose roommate secretly rapes little girls
Yes, these are my protagonists. My antagonists have more serious mental issues.
In real life, of course, I would prefer to avoid people who hear voices or have murderous impulses. So why do I find "normal" heroes to be boring in fiction? I think it's because I immerse myself in the story, and become the heroic character for a time, which frees me to say, think, and do things I would never say, think, or do. One of my protagonists lies to himself and treats people with savage rudeness, which is definitely not something I approve of. If I knew him in real life, I'd hate him. But I like being inside his point of view, since it's so different from my own. And he has a lot of growing to do as a character, which makes for fun storytelling.
- an agoraphobic giant with an overprotective mother
- a bookish kid who watched an angry mob murder his family
- an anorexic mermaid
- a telepathic seductress with jealousy issues
- a gambler and compulsive liar who murdered his father
- a spoiled prince with solid gold and silver body parts who trusts no one
- a mountain man whose roommate secretly rapes little girls
Jan 25, 2012
Clear internet vs. Broadband cable internet
I want to take a moment here to reflect on the incredibly bad customer service of Clear 4G, a WiFi internet service which is offered in my area as an alternative to DSL or cable. Most people want an alternative to the big cable corporations, such as Time Warner and Comcast. Clear could tap that huge market and become a major corporation in its own right ... if it could get its act together and offer competitive prices and decent support. But it doesn't.
First of all, potential customers should be aware that Clear lies. Their customer support (outsourced to foreign countries) representatives barely understand English, and apparently it's okay for them to lie to customers or potential customers. If they tell you the service costs $35/month, it actually costs $42/month. If they tell you there's no contract, there's actually a 2-year contract that you're locked into. I've been shifted on the phone to two different representatives who told me two different prices for the same modem.
Once I realized that their company policy is to lie to customers, I asked for email (written) confirmation on the next change to my account. They told me that their company policy is to never put anything in writing. I can see why...
So today, I got broadband installed from my local cable mega-corporation, and cancelled Clear 4G. My cancellation call went like this:
REP: "Why are you cancelling ma'am?"
ME: "Bad customer service."
REP: "Oh i am very sorry ma'am. Let me transfer you."
new REP: "Why are you cancelling ma'am?"
ME: "Bad customer service."
REP: "Oh i am very sorry ma'am. Please hold."
[3 minutes later]
REP: "We can offer $27 a month and waive the first month."
ME: "I want higher speed, and I already signed up with another service."
REP: "We can offer $27 a month at higher speed."
ME: "Your company policy is to lie. I've been told in the same phone call that high speed would be $45/month, and then the next rep said $50/month. You don't put anything in writing, so I can't trust what you say over the phone. Clear also locked me into a 2-year contract, when the rep told me there would be no contract."
REP: "This high speed will be $27/month, and we will waive the first month."
ME: "I don't believe you. Please cancel my account."
Then we did 5 more minutes of the song and dance. Anyway, I hope broadband Turbo will be better. I don't have high hopes, but at least I hope they won't have a company policy of flat-out lying to customers. (For the record, $27/month for high speed would be a great deal ... if it were true.)
For your entertainment: I did one chat session online with Clear, in an attempt to get their contradictions in writing. Here's the chat transcript:
Hello Abigail. Please wait while we find a CLEAR specialist to help you.
Your question is: I would like to replace my home modem lease with a refurbished home modem.
All agents are currently busy. Please stand by.
An agent will be with you in a moment. Thank you for your patience.
You have been connected to Dennis.
Abigail: Hi Dennis. I just spoke on the phone with a representative named Cesar, and he said I could buy a refurbished modem for $50 (one time fee), which would also cancel my 2-year service contract and make it monthly. Is this true?
Dennis: Thank you for contacting Clear, my name is Dennis. So I can help, may I please have your first and last name?
Abigail: Abigail Goldsmith
Dennis: Thank you for the information. Please allow me a moment to pull up your account.
Abigail: Right now, I'm locked into a 2 year contract (not my choice), and I'm unhappy with all the hidden fees Clear hit me with. I'm paying $7/mo for a modem lease, plus the basic $35 internet service.
Dennis: Yes, you can purchase the device for $50.
Abigail: Would this device: a) Replace my current home modem, and work just as well?
Abigail: b) cost $50 one-time only? (not a lease)
Dennis: I see.
Abigail: c) cancel my two year contract and make it month to month?
Dennis: A new device?
Abigail: refurbished
Abigail: a home modem to replace the one I'm leasing (which is white)
Dennis: Okay.
Abigail: ... can you answer my questions?
Dennis: That will be a Home modem with no Wi-Fi.
Abigail: the one I have has WiFi
Abigail: it's the basic CLEAR Moden wf Wi-Fi
Dennis: Yes
Abigail: I am asking about buying a refurbished modem to replace it
Abigail: you're saying that I could buy one for $50, but it would lack the Wi-Fi?
Dennis: Yes
Dennis: The one with Wi-Fi refurbished is $79.99.
Abigail: What is it called? Series G or Series M?
Abigail: What is the difference between those two?
Dennis: Series G. It has no built in Wi-Fi but functions the same.
Dennis: No difference much, only the manufacturer.
Abigail: neither one has Wi-Fi?
Abigail: hello?
Dennis: Yes
Abigail: Dennis, can you transfer me to someone who can type faster, or have faster comprehension?
Dennis: All agents are assisting right now.
Dennis: To give you the best assistance regarding this matter, please call our Account Services Department at 888-888-3113.
Abigail: I'm chatting because I want this in writing.
Abigail: I want to know: If I buy a refurbished modem, will that cancel my 2 year contract and make it monthly?
Dennis: No
Abigail: ok, that contradicts what I was told on the phone.
Dennis: If you would buy a modem and then you change your plan, that will cancel the 2 year contract.
Abigail: I want to be clear on this, before I dump more money into CLEAR. Please answer:
Abigail: Are you talking about a package deal? In other words, the deals listed here: http://www.clear.com/packages
Dennis: I'll check.
Dennis: Please wait.
Abigail: ok
Dennis: Yes, those are the deals.
Abigail: so if I buy one of those, it cancels my current contract WITHOUT the cancellation fee?
Abigail: (according to the phone guy, my cancellation fee would be $92.50 this month)
Dennis: We will just switch the plan. But it will also switch the service to NO Contract.
Dennis: Yes
Abigail: No cancellation fee?
Dennis: If you will switch plan. Yes.
Dennis: Month to Month plans have no cancellation fee.
Abigail: I'm not currently on a month to month plan, though.
Abigail: one more thing: Those package deals offer 4G Home service for $50. It used to be $45, and I was told $45 over the phone today. Which is it?
Dennis: It will be $50.
Abigail: Why did the phone guy tell me $45?
Dennis: There are no entries regarding your conversation just summaries. But I do verify that it is $50.
Abigail: Time Warner cable offers internet service for $30/month.
Dennis: But surely that will at a limited speed.
Abigail: I'll call them today and get back to Clear. Thanks for answering my questions.
Dennis: You are most welcome!
Dennis: I apologize for the inconvenience incurred to you by this issue.
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FOLLOW UP:
Apparently I'm not the only one who had problems with Clear. They've been accused of running a Ponzi scheme, and there's a website for complaints, as well as a pending class action lawsuit. To make a long story short: Don't believe their advertising, or any claims they make. They're lying.
Apparently I'm not the only one who had problems with Clear. They've been accused of running a Ponzi scheme, and there's a website for complaints, as well as a pending class action lawsuit. To make a long story short: Don't believe their advertising, or any claims they make. They're lying.
Jan 15, 2012
Abby Online
It's been a busy 2012 so far, and we're only halfway through January. First, I was interviewed on an art & architecture podcast for Austin, Texas. You can stream/download the interview HERE, or from iTUNES.
I'm collaborating with a programmer and some other friends to create iPhone games and apps of my own design. This is super exciting for me, since it's the first time I'm getting to work on my own games. I'd like to pump out a lot of material and see if anything takes off. The advantages we have: A talented team with lots of excitement and passion, and (if I say so myself) good ideas. The disadvantages: Lack of budget, and my own inexperience in marketing. The more I learn about marketing, the more scary it seems. Anyway, I will do my best. I'll let everyone know when our first game comes out. If you haven't subscribed to my blog, please do so!
I'm recording tutorial videos for 3D Modeling in 3dsmax. They're available in HD on my YouTube channel, and on the new tutorial page of my website. I plan to add more tutorials for animation, Flash, and other art software. This is partially just because it's fun to make videos, and relatively easy nowadays. It's also to prepare for my first job as a teacher. I will be teaching a 3D Animation class once per week at the local community college.
Games, contract art, teaching. What else am I doing? Still writing novels, of course. Actually ... no ... I'm editing and marketing novels now. I would like to get back to writing original material, but sadly, I've learned beyond any shadow of doubt that marketing is important if one wants to sell one's work. I'm 3/4 through an edit of Book 2, and in the process of querying agents and publishers about Book 1. Still getting top tier rejections for my short stories, but I haven't written any new short stories in a few years. Participating in (and enjoying) my local novel critique group. It's a talented bunch of writers.
I wish I could report more on my personal life, but there's not much to say. My adorable dog says "hello." She apparently sees the HOA (home owner's association) lady as a threat, which could be why the HOA lady got on my case a few months ago. My dog normally loves people, but every once in a while, she goes into attack mode ... this was the first time I saw her growl at a woman, though. Strange. Usually she has a problem with men in uniforms wearing hats. (I will add that I don't encourage aggression in my dog; she just has guard dog tendencies. She might be part pitbull or akita, and I suspect she might have been abused before I got her.)
Movie Reviews:
I enjoyed HUGO, both visually wonderful and good storytelling. I saw TINTIN in 3D, and although it was visually stunning, I thought the story was weak; predictable and beating the same joke to death. THE GIRL WITH THE DRAGON TATTOO (American version) was really great. I was pleasantly surprised that it followed the book closely, and managed to do it well. There's an example of a well written screenplay adaptation.
Book Reviews:
I read the first ten books in the ANITA BLAKE, vampire hunter series. What can I say? GUILTY PLEASURES is aptly named. I'm not sure I can recommend this series for everyone, but the first four or five books entertained me. After that, there's some fall-off. Many fans say that it devolves into weirdo erotica after the tenth book, and I can see that happening. Dating a vampire and then dating a werewolf is fine. Menage-a-trois sex with a werewolf and a vampire, plus bondage rape with a wereleopard, and turning into a succubus ... um, starting to cross a line there.
Then I read the Stieg Larsson series, which starts with THE GIRL WITH THE DRAGON TATTOO. Interesting stuff. People may scoff, but I find the books to be very feminist, despite being written by a man! The main characters get a little ridiculous and unbelievable, especially in the second and third book, but I don't mind ridiculousness with a good story, which this had. Salander is a cool character. No one knows if she has Asperger's Syndrome or what, but she's a criminal mastermind who looks like a sullen Goth teenager, so who cares?
And I just finished listening to Scott Sigler's THE STARTER, a sequel to THE ROOKIE. Yes, that's right, I don't have a clue about sports or football, yet I read two books about football. I'm just a hopeless Sigler fan. I guess it's weird that I like his alien voice acting and his super-weird alien universe, where humans play pro sports alongside drooling alien teammates. What a cool idea, though.
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I'm collaborating with a programmer and some other friends to create iPhone games and apps of my own design. This is super exciting for me, since it's the first time I'm getting to work on my own games. I'd like to pump out a lot of material and see if anything takes off. The advantages we have: A talented team with lots of excitement and passion, and (if I say so myself) good ideas. The disadvantages: Lack of budget, and my own inexperience in marketing. The more I learn about marketing, the more scary it seems. Anyway, I will do my best. I'll let everyone know when our first game comes out. If you haven't subscribed to my blog, please do so!
I'm recording tutorial videos for 3D Modeling in 3dsmax. They're available in HD on my YouTube channel, and on the new tutorial page of my website. I plan to add more tutorials for animation, Flash, and other art software. This is partially just because it's fun to make videos, and relatively easy nowadays. It's also to prepare for my first job as a teacher. I will be teaching a 3D Animation class once per week at the local community college.
Games, contract art, teaching. What else am I doing? Still writing novels, of course. Actually ... no ... I'm editing and marketing novels now. I would like to get back to writing original material, but sadly, I've learned beyond any shadow of doubt that marketing is important if one wants to sell one's work. I'm 3/4 through an edit of Book 2, and in the process of querying agents and publishers about Book 1. Still getting top tier rejections for my short stories, but I haven't written any new short stories in a few years. Participating in (and enjoying) my local novel critique group. It's a talented bunch of writers.
I wish I could report more on my personal life, but there's not much to say. My adorable dog says "hello." She apparently sees the HOA (home owner's association) lady as a threat, which could be why the HOA lady got on my case a few months ago. My dog normally loves people, but every once in a while, she goes into attack mode ... this was the first time I saw her growl at a woman, though. Strange. Usually she has a problem with men in uniforms wearing hats. (I will add that I don't encourage aggression in my dog; she just has guard dog tendencies. She might be part pitbull or akita, and I suspect she might have been abused before I got her.)
Movie Reviews:
I enjoyed HUGO, both visually wonderful and good storytelling. I saw TINTIN in 3D, and although it was visually stunning, I thought the story was weak; predictable and beating the same joke to death. THE GIRL WITH THE DRAGON TATTOO (American version) was really great. I was pleasantly surprised that it followed the book closely, and managed to do it well. There's an example of a well written screenplay adaptation.
Book Reviews:
I read the first ten books in the ANITA BLAKE, vampire hunter series. What can I say? GUILTY PLEASURES is aptly named. I'm not sure I can recommend this series for everyone, but the first four or five books entertained me. After that, there's some fall-off. Many fans say that it devolves into weirdo erotica after the tenth book, and I can see that happening. Dating a vampire and then dating a werewolf is fine. Menage-a-trois sex with a werewolf and a vampire, plus bondage rape with a wereleopard, and turning into a succubus ... um, starting to cross a line there.
Then I read the Stieg Larsson series, which starts with THE GIRL WITH THE DRAGON TATTOO. Interesting stuff. People may scoff, but I find the books to be very feminist, despite being written by a man! The main characters get a little ridiculous and unbelievable, especially in the second and third book, but I don't mind ridiculousness with a good story, which this had. Salander is a cool character. No one knows if she has Asperger's Syndrome or what, but she's a criminal mastermind who looks like a sullen Goth teenager, so who cares?
And I just finished listening to Scott Sigler's THE STARTER, a sequel to THE ROOKIE. Yes, that's right, I don't have a clue about sports or football, yet I read two books about football. I'm just a hopeless Sigler fan. I guess it's weird that I like his alien voice acting and his super-weird alien universe, where humans play pro sports alongside drooling alien teammates. What a cool idea, though.
If you want to receive my infrequent updates, please subscribe to my blog!
Nov 11, 2011
Update and Thoughts on Mind Readers
Time for a bit of an update! I got my first two (form) rejection letters from this year's round of novel querying. Rejection is never pleasant, but it's especially hard when you spend years rewriting the 1-page query letter. Literary agents usually never get past this simple-yet-vitally-important letter. They get flooded with hundreds of query letters per week, and that's on top of the daily work they need to do for their existing clients. I'm going to try and keep my complaining online to a minimum. I'll let you and the rest of the world know if ... ahem, *WHEN*, I land an agent.
Tomorrow, I'm going through a corn maze. I have also begun to substitute teach a 3D Animation class at the nearby community college. It's my first time teaching, and I'm pretty stoked about it!
One of the games I've worked on this year is coming to the App store. If you or your child want a simple and fun way to learn how to hear/play music, check out Tune Hopper.
I just got my shipment of Book 6 in the SmartBoys Club book series, which I've been illustrating. These are great books for middle grade readers, girls or boys.
Work life: I continue to freelance from home, using 3D Studio Max, Photoshop, Illustrator, Flash, and a variety of other art programs. What's next? Should I start a business in e-learning apps? Should I make a series of short animated films? Should I write some silly e-books and sell them? Should I just concentrate on expanding my current self-employed contract business?
What do you think? I have exciting ideas for all of the above, but only enough time to focus on one.
Torth series update: I'm still editing Book 2. Just one major edit, and it should be done by the end of this year.
Writing topic food for thought: We no longer have much folklore, but instead have fantasy books. As a genre writer, are you willing to break with tradition and make a new kind of vampire, elf, zombie, dragon, or whatever? This is about originality, a topic I feel strongly about. Many writers seem uncomfortable about inventing their own worlds and aliens. Even when they do it, they often follow traditions that were laid out by previous writers. I like to break with tradition.
When it comes to mind readers, they're often treated a certain way in fiction. Either they are benevolent and kind (Professor X, Deanna Troi), or they are befuddled by their power (Jean Gray, the cop in "Heroes," and many more). In order to justify this befuddlement, mind readers in fiction often gain their powers late in life, or have very little control over their power, tuning in and out of thoughts at random as the story requires.
I say that's all bull****. First of all, a lifelong mind reader would damn well know how to use that power effectively. Whenever I read or watch someone else's telepathic character get befuddled, I feel a strong sense of author manipulation. It wasn't thought through all the way. The writer was lazy; rather than actually think about the full spectrum of implications of mind reading--its limitations and possibilities--they try to make it work without a set of rules, forcing it to fill a plot need and glossing over the plot holes it creates.
Second of all, if you are privy to the darkest secrets of your fellow humans, you're not going to be a benevolent sweetheart. More like cynical and misanthropic.
And if you have the ability to control other people's minds, that is the trump card of all super-powers. It trumps *EVERYTHING* else. Any character who can use a Jedi mind trick is likely to become super-corrupt. I use it sparingly in my fiction ... because much like time travel, it can easily mess up a story unless it's thoroughly thought out.
And that concludes my thoughts on mind readers for the afternoon.
Tomorrow, I'm going through a corn maze. I have also begun to substitute teach a 3D Animation class at the nearby community college. It's my first time teaching, and I'm pretty stoked about it!
One of the games I've worked on this year is coming to the App store. If you or your child want a simple and fun way to learn how to hear/play music, check out Tune Hopper.
I just got my shipment of Book 6 in the SmartBoys Club book series, which I've been illustrating. These are great books for middle grade readers, girls or boys.
Work life: I continue to freelance from home, using 3D Studio Max, Photoshop, Illustrator, Flash, and a variety of other art programs. What's next? Should I start a business in e-learning apps? Should I make a series of short animated films? Should I write some silly e-books and sell them? Should I just concentrate on expanding my current self-employed contract business?
What do you think? I have exciting ideas for all of the above, but only enough time to focus on one.
Torth series update: I'm still editing Book 2. Just one major edit, and it should be done by the end of this year.
Writing topic food for thought: We no longer have much folklore, but instead have fantasy books. As a genre writer, are you willing to break with tradition and make a new kind of vampire, elf, zombie, dragon, or whatever? This is about originality, a topic I feel strongly about. Many writers seem uncomfortable about inventing their own worlds and aliens. Even when they do it, they often follow traditions that were laid out by previous writers. I like to break with tradition.
When it comes to mind readers, they're often treated a certain way in fiction. Either they are benevolent and kind (Professor X, Deanna Troi), or they are befuddled by their power (Jean Gray, the cop in "Heroes," and many more). In order to justify this befuddlement, mind readers in fiction often gain their powers late in life, or have very little control over their power, tuning in and out of thoughts at random as the story requires.
I say that's all bull****. First of all, a lifelong mind reader would damn well know how to use that power effectively. Whenever I read or watch someone else's telepathic character get befuddled, I feel a strong sense of author manipulation. It wasn't thought through all the way. The writer was lazy; rather than actually think about the full spectrum of implications of mind reading--its limitations and possibilities--they try to make it work without a set of rules, forcing it to fill a plot need and glossing over the plot holes it creates.
Second of all, if you are privy to the darkest secrets of your fellow humans, you're not going to be a benevolent sweetheart. More like cynical and misanthropic.
And if you have the ability to control other people's minds, that is the trump card of all super-powers. It trumps *EVERYTHING* else. Any character who can use a Jedi mind trick is likely to become super-corrupt. I use it sparingly in my fiction ... because much like time travel, it can easily mess up a story unless it's thoroughly thought out.
And that concludes my thoughts on mind readers for the afternoon.
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